Do the preparation task first. Then read the text and tips and do the exercises.
Preparation
To: recruitment@new-company.com
From: Susan Nelson
Subject: Digital Marketing Executive application
Dear Ms Jones,
I'm writing in response to your advertisement for a Digital Marketing Executive. My name is Susan Nelson and I'm a Social Media Marketing Assistant. I have had this job for the past two years and I believe I am the person you need for your new role.
The bulk of my work involves designing and implementing online marketing campaigns across a range of channels. I am very comfortable using analytics to assess campaign success and drive future initiatives. I work with a range of social media platforms and tools for digital marketing.
I have always worked in the retail industry and am familiar with the seasonal nature of business such as yours and have the skills to push your business forward through creativity and innovation. I would very much like the opportunity to both bring my experience and enthusiasm to this role while continuing to develop professionally and personally.
Following initial research into your company I very much feel we would be a good fit for each other and I would welcome the opportunity to discuss this position with you in person.
Please find attached my CV.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Susan Nelson
Tips
- Try to find out the name of the person hiring and address your cover letter to them.
- Start with a clear statement about who you are and the role you are applying for.
- Then give information about your current work (or studies if you are still a student).
- Mention how and why this experience is suited to the new company and role, including any transferable skills (= things you have learned that you will take with you to future jobs).
- End with a closing statement that suggests further contact.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Dear Ms. Nhu,
I am excited to apply for the recruitment trainee position at your company and believe my skills and passion make me an ideal fit. As a junior student at Ton Duc Thang University (TDTU) majoring in Hospitality Management, I am aware that the knowledge I have gained in school is just the tip of the iceberg. I am eager to learn about HR seriously and professionally and am confident that my strong scores on the TOEIC and MOS exams, which demonstrate my proficiency in English and computer skills, will make me a valuable asset to your team.
I have always been passionate about learning and have consistently sought out opportunities to further my knowledge and skills. For example, I have volunteered at a local HR firm and have completed several online courses in HR management. I am confident that my background in hospitality management and my strong communication and organizational skills make me well-suited for this position. I am also impressed by the values and mission of your company and believe I could make a meaningful contribution to your team.
I would be honored to have the opportunity to discuss this position with you in more detail and am available for an interview at your convenience. Thank you for considering my application. I look forward to the opportunity to join your team and contribute to your success.
Sincerely,
Huynh Nguyen
Here are a few suggestions for ways you could revise the text to make it even stronger:
Start with a more engaging opening sentence: Instead of "I am writing in response to your advertisement," you could try something like "I am excited to apply for the recruitment trainee position at your company and believe my skills and passion make me an ideal fit."
Emphasize your qualifications: You mentioned that you have taken the TOEIC and MOS exams, but you could add more detail to explain how these qualifications make you a strong candidate. For example, "I am confident that my strong scores on the TOEIC and MOS exams, which demonstrate my proficiency in English and computer skills, will make me a valuable asset to your team."
Add specific examples of your enthusiasm for learning: You mentioned that you are eager to learn about HR seriously and professionally, but it could be helpful to provide specific examples of how you have demonstrated this in the past. For example, "I have always been passionate about learning and have consistently sought out opportunities to further my knowledge and skills. For example, I have volunteered at a local HR firm and have completed several online courses in HR management."
Use confident language: It's great that you believe you and the company would be a good fit, but try to be more specific about why you think that. For example, "I am confident that my background in hospitality management and my strong communication and organizational skills make me well-suited for this position. I am also impressed by the values and mission of your company and believe I could make a meaningful contribution to your team."
Make a clear request for an interview: It's important to end your letter with a strong closing that makes it clear you are interested in pursuing the opportunity further. You could try something like "I would be honored to have the opportunity to discuss this position with you in more detail and am available for an interview at your convenience. Thank you for considering my application. I look forward to the opportunity to join your team and contribute to your success."